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Click hereThe captain slid off Ashley, completely spent. Ashley laid there with a big smile and her dad's cun spilling out of her cunt.
Vicky wasted no time in lapping up the captain's cum from Ashley's cunt.
That night was an incredible time.
Everyone enjoyed each other.
The captain watched me and mom fuck as well as watching Ashley and Vicky and my mom having sex.
The celebration went into the morning and we were all exhausted, but satisfied.
After breakfast we said our goodbyes to the captain and Ashley, who invited us back.
We got ourselves together for the trip back home and kept saying that we had to come back one day to see our new friends.
The trip back was going to be long but we had some nice memories to talk about and hopefully some great memories will be made after we get home.
All mothers and sons should experience such uninhabited sex.
While your stories flow well and are very creative, they are filled with typos and misspellings that would be picked up during a proof-reading. By enlisting the help of an editor you will be able to loose the unnecessary duplications that slow the flow of your work and make it somewhat stilted.
Please don't take my comments to mean that I dislike your writing. I am merely trying to offer you some constructive criticism, which will help to polish your writing.
Statements on writing are some of the most fundamental parts of commenting on stories. By your "logic" no criticism, no commenting, would be permitted.
Keep it up these characters are well done. You have a good following and we enjoy your stories so keep giving us your best work and we will continue to read them.
Don't listen to anyone. This is a great story! Its just a STORY. Don't clutter your writing with garbage conversation keep it simple. You're doing a great job! I mean Hawaii, Sex, Family, New Friends what more could you ask for, besides when is the next chapter? I'm a follower. Now get back to writing! I'll be waiting to see the next chapter and other stories you write. Keep up the great job! I'm a reader and live in Hawaii.
I appreciate all your comments. I try to do the best I can in making the stories seem like real life. I don't like to clutter the stories with endless dialogue or back and forth talk. Anyway, I will continue trying to do the best I can.
Finally get a good mom and son story and all you do is complain.
Why do you even come here??