All Comments on 'Mom, You're The Best'

WELLDONE...

Excellent story, well written, and hot at!

One hell of a story so turn on reading it

I think this could become a series I HOPE

Good read.

Totally hot

Keep the story Going PLEASE

please give more emphasis to the description and handling of the boobs of the respective girls, please

It was a good read

subtle build and so very very hot. It would be a real shame not continue the adventure with more chapters. Well done.

Very well written. I like your getting all the family involved, just wish there were more stories like yours on Literotica. Please keep up the Family/Group sex theme. I’ll be looking forward to your next story.

DNA

Fabulous build up, with the perfect amount of detail. Not sure if you add to it, or simply craft more stories with your style - which I love.

If you have any ideas how you would like it to continue, please let me know.

So great to read this right through.

But - What about the other husband ???

It is soooooooo true how we don’t enjoy ourselves so much in life because we don’t broaden our minds. Hell - I am in my 70’s and still trying new experiences. Wouldn’t have it any other way

I really liked the story. I liked the characters and the description of their couplings. I liked the build up and the dialogue. You could run this into a series if you wanted to. Thanks for your time and imagination.

Bloody brilliant. More please, nothing like people incest and sharing well done

I think you need to choose a perspective for the story. Are you writing from Jen's point of view or as a narrator? If as Jen, you can't describe what happens when she's not there. You switched back and forth which was confusing.

HOT FUCKING STORY though!

I like this story a lot & I hope you are writing the next parts to it & keep up the good work.

Until the father got involved.

Story draws you in. The ending was perfect.

Now I have to go check out any other stories of yours.

You've crafted a story full of passion, grounded in realism (for the most part), and naughty and fun. It's really good and I disagree with the idea it needs a sequel. Some stories need to live on their own and it would be difficult for me to see how this story would be better with a second trip into their lives.

If I have a few criticisms, they are from wonky dialogue at times. It doesn't take away from the story, but not every woman is going to repeat the line to see someone's cock. But main criticism is the back-and-forth between first-person, third-person, and everything in between. I found it a little jarring.

That said, it's an exciting mix of realism and fantasy and I rather loved it. I'm adding you to my favorites and look forward to seeing where you go.

Excellent detail well written

Very exciting family orgy with a friend. I like it when Helen let John smell her pussy first. I like the smell of pussy and always love sniffing soiled panties.

Damn hot story.. what a way to have fun!

I loved the story and found it fucking hot! My only criticism would be like TabooTales1 said, the back and forth between the first person and third person point of views was somewhat offputting. I think it would have been better if it had been written in the first person and simply switched characters as needed. I recently read a story that did just that and it worked. When they switched characters, they simply identified the character in bold black at the start of the paragraph. For some reason, I find stories written in the first person hotter.

Great story

Group sex is great but to have the chance at family sex, would be the icing on anyone's plate. Plus the fact of having THAT one good friend join in....great job

Most fun I've had reading in a good while

wow I loved the slow tease!!!!!

Awesome

I would love to read a follow up story :-)

Great story, Written without a lot of over-exagerration. I loved how the mom played her friend once she learned she was behind it all.

One of the hottest stories I've ever read! It's nice to see a family fuck and a friend that started it all! Loved it!

It started hot with Helen and John, and then John and Zoe. Very hot. But part of the arousal factor is the secretiveness, the reluctance, the operating behind full awareness. Then it got overly complicated when five were involved and it lost me. But still, a five because of the first half.

One of the best I've ever read !!!!! thanks

DomJ69 - terrific story - would be a great movie as well. Many thanks for writing and sharing your story. I will begin reading the others now. Thanks so much.

It took me all day to get through this. Each time I started my erection took over hard all day. Great story

Awesome story, was able to edge it along up to the end and painted my own chest...Thanks for a great story.

Watch the POV. If a character is I then you can't include things that character did not witness. Just make the stories in 3rd person, saves these problems.

What a great story

Great story. Got so hard reading this theme. Not sure where you go from here.

Really enjoyed how it all developed. Even though I knew the outcome, it played well.

story was awesome but its predictable story .try something diffrent jelousy is missing in you story

Great story loved it

This was a ret hot story, I really enjoyed in. A sequel is in order here!

The best friend opening doors for the boy is a good start, Having him look at a sexy looking woman is wild. Her ever growing intense orgasms are rather descriptive. Sex for the pleasure of sex is the best kind of a story line.

Thank you so much for one hell of a story. Loved the plot the writing and how it made me feel.

Love Carmella xxx

Dom, first off, let me say that although I did not quite enjoy the story, I found the plot and your imagination good. I did not vote you a 5 so I refrained from voting period.

I found the story quite rushed. There was little character development and the sex was handled far too quickly. The shifting perspectives the way you handled them were very confusing at times. I found the dialogue to be stilted and awkward. All in all, I thought it was quite tedious reading this story. Lastly, the title was horribly misleading.

You have a great imagination but I suggest you slow your roll, take the time needed to turn this from a good story to a great one. You might consider getting yourself an editor.

Sorry I didn't have all good things to say.

Loved it, read it in stages as it got me so horny, would have loved to have a family like that

I never read stories more than two or three pages , but im glad I read this through to the end. Extremely hot and great work!

First, I gave this one five stars because I got off to it, and it held my interest right to the end. Unlike some of the other commenters, I thought this one got more interesting once the rest of the family started getting involved, but that’s kind of my thing, so mileage will vary, I guess.

I think PetSkunk was a bit too harsh, but I do agree with some of his criticisms of this one. The shifting POV was confusing. It probably should have just been written in third person, but you could also have transitioned between perspectives by having the mom make clear that she was telling us (the reader) about things her son or husband told her after the fact.

For me, the thing that held this back from perfection had more to do with characterization and motivation. People will obviously have different opinions on this, but I think what makes the incest kink so hot is the idea of normal people enjoying doing something that they know is completely fucked up and wrong. That aspect was missing from this story. There wasn’t much buildup to the incest at all, and most of the characters (Zoe in particular) just jumped in almost out of nowhere. When the incest actually happened, you repeatedly reminded us that “it’s just sex.” It’s like you wanted to repeatedly remind your readers that the incest didn’t actually mean anything to these people, which sucked a lot of the excitement out of it for me.

The one part that really worked for me was Mom and Dad’s conversation where they agreed that he could fuck their daughter. It felt like a real conversation that actually addressed the topic. The rest felt like sex between strangers, which kinda defeats the point of these stories in my opinion.

I think the sex scenes themselves were pretty good, but as some other commenters noted, it did get a bit repetitive. The lack of physical descriptions of the characters (other than the son’s thick cock) also made it difficult to visualize what anyone looked like, which also made the sex less exciting than it could have been.

All that said, I think the rating for this one speaks for itself. Even with these flaws, it’s far better than the vast majority of stories in this category. I enjoyed reading it and look forward to whatever you come up with next!

-EZ

I have thoroughly enjoyed your story. Very good plot. Excellent writing. Was a tremendous turn on reading it.

Great story, well written

So hot, reminded me of sex with my 2 sisters when I was a teen.

Well written and enjoyed it all

I really hope there’s more and more to it

There has to be a follow up to this amazing/awesome story. MORE, MORE.

Excellent story for reading and masturbating to! Shot several big loads of cum while reading all 6 pages!

It’s my first comment ever & I have been reading since almost 10 years on literotica & this one was just worth it. The entire story is captivating & my cock was constantly looking forward to a character like Helen & Zoe but the mother is what’s most lucrative & I hope to read a lot more, author.

Great character development. Good read. I

you need to write more and them getting into anal too and lesbian intro all three women

Keep up man. It was the best i had since forever. This story is the first i commented on. Truth has been said. Although coulve been more kinky, like cosplay? Goddd... this story got me off for two days.

May the Force be with you!

keep up, excellent stuff

Fucking hot!

Absolutely brilliant, never a dull or boring moment. Constantly moving story loved the views from all party members and the attention to detail. Keep it up exceptional quality

Arghhh!!!

Urrgghhh!!!

LOL, have you ever had sex with a woman who wasn't a pirate or a Neanderthal?

It sounds like what people think people sound like. It sounds like written dialogue instead of naturally spoken.

Very interesting story

That's one hawtt story.

IT flowed well. Surprised there was no zoe to Mom action. Sexy fantasy stimulation

That was excellent I look forward to reading more of your work.

If you could add some transitions that would make reading your stories a bit easier. Going from John POV and then to Mom POV

Next: Zoe figures out Fred isn't dead, just bored. Alone at first, and later with help from Mom, Helen and their golf widow friends, Zoe and John persuade Fred and his golfing buddies to give Zoe and John full boat scholarships to Uni. Zoe and John start an agency to help other needy young people and wealthy matures fund similar scholarship arrangements. All have fun and fill their respective needs.

Loved it

I could not put it down!

loved it actually,,very hot,,could not put it down,,well written, well paced..pure fantasy but we all wish we had a family like this one. didnt want it to end.. more please.

Dunno the dad stuff ruined it for me. The rest was very good but that was to much.

Yeah, I have to agree with the previous poster, the DADDY thing ruined it for me as well, overall a good story, but not the dad part and the orgy thing was a bit much.

One hell of an erotic story. 5 stars. More stories in this vain would be appreciated.

Now that fathers fucking daughter and sons fucking mother, I think the two women should accidentally get pregnant buy the wrong partners including Helen in the debauchery of pregnancy because of her cheating on her husband . While Helen had all this time to cheat with the men of this family where was her husband .

I like stories in Lit to have a sense of believability, not sure this one qualifies. When a paragraph has five people's names used I get confused. I agree with others that The "Daddy" stuff was a bit offputting.

Only four.

One of the MOST incredible stories I have ever read... who the hell wouldn't want that to happen in their lives.. if you disagree..Your Lying and You know it.. Damn.. I read it twice.. what images it paints inside your head to think about ALL day long... Great job

Too long but very detailed the redacción...! Hot Turn me on the first part before starting the incest...! Great job loved it

Thank you, this was a great read, I enjoyed the story start to finish! I have watched a lot of porn over the years and nothing I've watched ever got me so worked up as this has. Multiple O's, I had to rest and shower ( I even shaved my pubic area) to finish reading this fantastic adventure!

5***** Too hot and too nasty and man do I wish I were there. I had one wife that came in buckets and we shared with her sister and husband - both could never get enough of her cum squirts. Thanks for the story.

brilliant story well paced made me horny from 1st paragraph

You lost me with the dom/sub stuff near the end of the first page.

Hawt, HaWT, HAWT!

11/10!!!!!

Great Story! Couldn’t quit reading, HOT

Wow, what a naughty, twisted, great read.

Good story. Incest is not usually my thing but you had me on this one.

Well done

One of the best ... Awesome I give you 101 Stars

Fun will written story that I enjoyed reading. Thank you.

Good storyline! Fluid narrative, hot scenes! Jen‘s dormant libido just had to be brought forward. Thanks!

I loved it

I loved it. It kept me enthralled.

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discrete: separate; disctinct

discreet: private; secret

I thought it was a good story it

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This is the best story that I’ve ever read in literotica! I would give it 10 stars if I could!

Good story but you kept changing the POV. Kind of acted like a speed bump. Geez...how could all the women be squirters and to the degree that it would drown a chicken. Now a comment regarding all stories on this site. Why do the protagonists always 'sip' wine in these stories? Just have a real drink for God's sake!

Where is the father-daughter tag? I feel like the author has misled me. If I had known I hadn't have begun reading. I couldn't finish the story.