by msboy
What kind of skirt makes a cameltoe? Do you mean shorts or yoga pants. Also the juice line was just dumb.
Just stop abusing English language.
I should have stopped reading when you used "feedbacks" in your prologue. I didn't and my suspicions were confirmed. This story is terrible and, if you continue to write, please do so in your native tongue so somebody out there may, and I use that term mercifully, may be able to appreciate your work. *
He's a very young guy, 18 to 21 years old, and his heart and imagination are obviously in the right place. msboy is fascinated by the idea of mothers and sons messing around. A mom stroking her kid's dick and cuddling his balls, a boy plunging his fingers into the same hairy hole he came out of, kind of saying hello again--one of the most beautiful and sexy things in life. Give this young beginning writer time to learn and hone his skills. We'll all benefit from it.
Captured the feeling of many guys. Seeing mom nude makes a big and lasting impression. Most guys just jo, but some lucky ones get more
This was pretty good for a first story. You definitely need to find an editor to help polish your story.
It is a good first story but there has to be some build-up leading up to the mom/son sex.
More importantly, no matter how sexually frustrated the mother is, shagging her son is a huge taboo for her and there has to be more than a little reluctance on the part of the mother.
Most of the sons however are always ready to seduce their mothers.
that is why in real life it is almost always the son who initiates the seduction of the mother.