All Comments on 'Mom's Kids Rock'

luke or mark pick a name

Quit reading about the fifth time something was described as 'divine'. Really, pick another adjective, will you?

Dafuq did I just read? Oh, and your adjectives were too annoyingly proper. Nobody says wonderful or divine while describing or talking about sex or fucking. It takes away from the story.

A good hot sexy story and I like that the son got to fuck his mom and sister and mom's boy friend got to fuck her daughter. That would make for some really hot home time.

Thanks for the read

Come on man... This isn't a historical piece... It's about mom fuckin son and daughter fucking moms boyfriend... Not even the queen of England says divine as much as you have in this story.

Lucky fucker, I would just love to get some action like this

This was such a boring story that it reminded me of the telephone directory. Look, don't say: "She said that that felt good." Have her say, "That felt good." This is called writing dialog. The other is called writing a term paper.

There's no sex in this story, none, only dull, repetitive words. As any writing teacher will tell you, show, don't tell.

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I thought her son's name was Luke, not Mark. Half-way through his name changed..

keep the story going!!!

Luke and Mark should have hooked up while mom and Lucy were playing

You kinda used the word "divine" a little too much. Perhaps a thesaurus? Also I agree with the others about the Luke/Mark part.

I believe that you might need an editor for making it seem more lifelike and so you dont have mess ups or grammar problems. Overall, loved the story, can't wait for the sequel.

i liked the read - but it was very quick. wish there was another chapter.

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Luke became mark near the end.