All Comments on 'Mom's My "Someone Special" Pt. 01'

I see you only have 3 stories written and to be honest your writing is some of the best I've seen in years(10 year lit user).

I'll definitely be keeping an eye out for your stories from here on out.

I found the story to be top form. Not to long and drawn out but not to short

Also I found the story very believable. I think alot of writer forget about immersion and you captured it perfectly .

I like to see another chapter or maybe another story with a similar story but a more in-depth stroy after having sex.

5 stars easily .

Fully enjoyed this little tale of yours.

And a strong decisive women that's

never letting that boy out of her bed

again is just all kinds of awesome....

Yep I'm a sucker for happy ending's.

Both Chris and his mom are the kind of people I would love to have as friends. They care about one another and, hopefully, that extends to others. Thanks for believable characters.

A thoroughly enjoyable story. Nicely paced, good characterization, with an excellent pay off. Looking forward to future chapters.

I agree with the others, great writing style and you have a unique way of making your characters personalities come to life. When Chris was explaining his failures as readers we could really feel his pain and the way you handled the Rochelle part of the story was classic because it was very believable. Just voted 5 stars and put you on my favorite author list. Looking forward to more chapters with these characters. Thanks,

boaman007@yahoo.com

It was well paced. We loved reading this. Hoping for another chapter. If not we understand. Oh my it was Really Good.

TBC

Excellent read. Well constructed and keeps you interested. Only noticed one thing and that was it should be choke and not chock but otherwise quite good. Ever need another eye let me know.

I loved it. A well written and greatly paced story. Nor was it just a fuck tale. The chemistry between the mother and son was just right.

Amazing! Great story!

My favourite stories in this genre are the ones that build slowly and finish with a beautiful love-making scene. You wrote this story perfectly, at a pace that completely fit the situation, leaving me feeling so very satisfied with its conclusion. However, I would be remiss if I didn't say I'd love to read more. I think there's more story left to tell with these two. I'd love to see you explore the possibility of a pregnancy between them and how they might handle his going away to school. Maybe she'll leave with him. Just some thoughts. :) All in all, you should be very proud of this work!

good stuff- hope there is a sequel

Excellent pacing with a believable storyline.

I do hope to see more!

A very thoughtful and well-written story !! Great background and dialogue among all the participants, the best being Mother and son. The sexual description and the intimacy and love between Mother and Son is great too. I hope for another chapter to see if they continue to have intimacy until he goes to college and maybe when he comes home between semesters etc. Thank you !!!!

Really great read, am eager to read more.

Utterly enjoyable. Thoroughly engaging. Wonderfully erotic. I can't wait for more.

"Less is More" What I mean is that you've kept it so simple and it became a masterpiece. "Let It Go" & "Let it Flow" Please! Continue the story line and show us where this relationship goes.

I cannot praise this story highly enough. I was absorbed from the first page. I would love to see this develop in a lovely way between mom & son

A powerful story of love and maturity. I hope you continue to bring us your best,

I enjoyed this quite a bit. The characters are likable and the sex is hot. I'm not sure why you called this Part 1. Because you resolved the two major conflicts in this story. Will he lose his virginity, and will it be with Mom?

So, what can you do with Part 2? Where does the conflict come from? I can only assume it comes from Rochelle, who is both confused and intrigued at getting turned down. I would like Rochelle to figure out that the son and mother are having an incestuous tryst. And instead of being put off by that, Rochelle decides to try to seduce them both! That's my fantasy. But I'm curious where you will take Part 2.

Great story .. from start to finish.

Very enjoyable read. I will read your other stories and I am anticipating Pt. 02!

Seriously good. Really easy to follow and understand. Well thought out and moderately descriptive. A little criticism in such a well written chapter.

Eagerly waiting for more.

You brought out the relationship between the mother and boy very well, by how you structured their story, and it made the climax of the story very sweet. Thank you!

First time in your category. Very tender, very real. A good read. Five stars.

Please continue this story its Feb. 1st. Don't let this story die

You writing brought the story to life. I was an observer of the beauty love making that can exist between a mother and her son. It reminded me of that special sense that can exist between son and his mother. The writing accomplished the revelation that a special relationship can spring into life between a mother and her son if allowed.

I know the lead to this says it all.

I look forward to any further direction you might take these characters in.

This was Mostdefinitely a great mother and son story. You are a fine writer, thank you for the hard work. Very much appreciated.

Really enjoyed reading. A lot of effort and time went into it. Had me excited all the way through it. Please keep writing and I'm looking forward to reading more.

This may be the best mother son story I have ever read. Wow all superlatives and no criticisms.

Glad you had fun.

Are you serious? It's good for the money - none - but great? He has half a paragraph explaining how he is grabbing salt, milk, eggs, etc, before telling us he is making pancakes. Why not just tell us he is making pancakes? Those tiny details aren't needed. And there is constant over explanation of a scene. The protagonist does something and then explains why he did it. It's called 'context clues' we can figure out what the character's intentions are without being constantly told why they are doing it.

Cut out the minute detail. Instead of telling us how the character feels (which you do often) let the action speak for themselves. I don't need to know every action and the thought behind it. Cut out that boring shit the story is half as long and twice as good.

Lit does prove one thing: There is a big difference between what most readers find enjoyable and what discerning minds find enjoyable.

I guess what is being said mostdef is that you are putting in the wrong details and leaving out the right ones. You've given information that's not needed which creates a need for more useless information while the other anon is saying you are putting in mundane details that do not need to be there. You're the writer, you're going to be biased and probably can't see what's wrong/refuse to see it-defensive. It's your work, stop defending it. Even Jk Rowling has her detractors, but look how well she's done (of course she doesn't need incest to get high marks).

BTW, I didn't delete my defence. The other half of this discussion is at the end of My Parents' Anniversary.

It makes the story a reality again instead of a fantasy. Good touch. Well placed, and well spent.

I WAS A SENIOR EDITOR FOR A NATION WIDE PUBLISHING COMPANY AND I WANNA TELL YOU, EVEN THOUGH YOU DON'T GET A LOT OF PRAISE FROM MANY FUCK WIT ANONS, YOU DID AN EXCEPTIONAL JOB ON THIS. SO WELL WRITTEN I'D HAVE PUSHED TO FOR A PRINT. THANK YOU FOR A BEAUTIFUL STORY! I COMMEND YOU WITH HIGH PRAISE.

But confused by this sentence, "sister and the girl whose twenty-first birthday party I'd go to in three years' time."

Please explain how old everyone is. 21-3=18. His 18yo suster is older, so how old are these guys?

Also, how in hell would he know now that he will be going to her 21st party? He may not be invited.

Good sex. And an intelligent plot.

Missed a couple of words that said four years ago.

Now if he takes mum's friend to prom, surely he would be considered an absolute loser. His mum had to help him get a date, let alone and old woman. Only worse would be taking mum as your date. Either way he would be scorned by the others.

Unless he took a prostitute, then not just a loser, but a smart one.

Glad you're not confused about their ages anymore.

Anyway, in my opinion, if one of my friends came to prom with a super hot, former model, I wouldn't have thought he was a loser, even if she was older. In fact, a lot of younger men, including myself, find older women desirable. So I didn't think it would be an issue or that he'd be the butt of ridicule. But that's just my opinion. Also, how would his friends know his mom set him up? I can tell you with certainty none of this is a problem in Pt. 03 of the story, when I do touch on the dance. Yes, I am still writing the story. Just struggling with the plot a little.

Thanks for your comments. And that's to everyone.

Didn't think I would enjoy it as much. Incest stories can be tricky.

I enjoyed your writing style, the flow of the story, the details and most of all the time you put in building up your character.

He feels real and his emotions and feelings feel real and honest. A great combination for a great story.

Loved it really and will be reading the next chapter.

Keep writing!

Josie : )

The story, the characters, the flow. Great! Still some editing issues but I love the story.

I really enjoyed Mom's My Someone Special Pt. 1

I thoroughly enjoyed this story. The character development was astounding. Plot was realistic. The intimacy, passion and sexual purity between mother and son was truly noteworthy. Although fiction, I wonder how much better off most men would be if mothers were allowed sexually educate them?

Loved the story, characters and pacing were perfect. I don't want to upset you so just consider the source, I have OCD so almost every thing I read I find errors, your story is no exception but it was still an enjoyable read for me.

This is more than a "good" effort...you have written a very sweet tale about a young man learning his way in a world that is so harsh & critical...

And, who better to learn with than the woman who birthed him, and will ALWAYS love him the most (in this case, at least!)

**5** Stars....now, on to next chapter...?

Awesome story gave it a 5 would love for you to continue more of this mother and son!!!!!!

I wish mom was wearing stockings too. Great story tho. Still have you 5 stars.

Awesome story gave it a 5 liked how you built up to mother fucking her son but can you add more to this story??????????????????????????

Pushing back into the unseen world from which we came, the euphoric merger of flesh called 'motherfucking' is truly a Blessing from the Heavens. Such an existentially joyful collision of bodies creates mountainous precipices of sublime pleasure, forever redefining the landscape of a mother and son's relationship. And yet, what really changes? A mother's love is infinite and eternal, before and after the astrological and hormonal singularity of motherfucking. A mother and son are already hardwired to love each other totally, but when the son fucks her head and plants seed in mother's vagina, an Edenic cycle completes itself. Mother becomes a vessel for her son again as he spews seminal fluid into her depths, and their love achieves a new spiritual dimension and purpose, reproducing incestuously, such as it was in the Garden, when St. Eve and her son Adam consummated their love.

Great story, but I can't help but feel bad for Rochelle, being left high and wet, for all intents and purposes. I would think part 2 would have Chris at least try and amend things with her. 5⭐

Fun, romantic story. Your editor is doing a very good job.

Much better than most I’ve read. The sex scenes; not too explicit and not too over the top.

Thanks,

Tob