All Comments on 'Mom's New Family Affair Ch. 10'

Good story - but way too much 'she chuckled' and laughing etc.....editor please correct....

I love this series and this chapter. The longer the better I say. Keep em cumming.

Very Hot! Long read, but such a good chapter!

Too many mistakes, it kills the story, spelling, grammar grrrrrrr lol

I finally hit my limit with "Hungrily was the only adjective...". Hungry is an adjective. Hungrily is an adverb.

It is about time you moved on to some different subject matter; throwing in the "anal" aspect, especially that John & Beth have been actively participating since they were 14 or 15, has added to the story, present and future!!

I looked at the author profile, and see that this is a 'couples collaboration'; now, it seems to me that, between 2 of you, the writing could really be better/the editing being shared. WTF, do you really not go back and check your grammar, etc?

I know this story is on the "older" side of the scale, but STILL, y'all could really do a re-write to clean all the chapters up, for future readers.

Still**5**stars!!

MADDOG