by Fantasier
Story didn't have a smooth flow. It came across as sort of stilted especially from Mom. She sounds sort of retarded.
This story was almost unreadable. I can only surmise that English is not the author's first language. I would encourage him/her to take advantage of one of Literotica's editors before posting another story.
It's the author's first foray into mom and son sex, and a great start. 18 year old Jason's not getting anything from his so called girlfriend, so as always mom comes to the rescue. She gives her kid an out of this world hand job, talking dirty to him, and Jason blows his balls all over the place. I dearly wish my own mother had done the same with me, let me show her my penis, said sweet admiring things about it though I'm only average and don't have 8 inches like Jason. Then my loving mommy would start jerking me off, like Jason's mom did for him, cupping and cuddling my balls, oh man! She'd urge me on to shoot, telling me she wants to see me blow my balls and how much semen I've got for my mommy. Sure as fuck, I'd blow the biggest load of my life, showing my dear dear mother I'm all grown up, a man now with the huge load of baby batter to prove it.
It does need a good edit and feels like it had been written in a huury. Best leave it for a week once done then return and you can see the obvious bloopers. having said all that you've got real talent and I thought you built the tension up well. I hope we see more from you
Well, at least it's more content and effort than you but into the same tired, trite, cliche, rote, inane comments.
Quite a few moms have given son helping hand. Many use as a reward for schoolwork or help around the house. It is safe and fun.
18yrs and still can't fix breakfast is not a man but a born wrong sissy. end of story cunt.
Also, I believe you might have meant to say I'm not HUNGRY.
English can't be your native language -- however I''ll still rate you with one star for effort.