All Comments on 'More Than Just Friends'

This was so poorly written that I could not finish reading it. Either improve your writing skills or get a good editor.

I agree. This could have been a much better story without all the grammar errors. Please get someone to help or edit .

I am in TOTAL agreement with the previous commenters. This was just so poorly written, I had to skip to the end.

Didn't get better then, either.

Please get an editor. This was painful.

A five year oid could write better

If you are so bold to trash another's FREE gift of a story:

-Man/woman up and use your name of a nickname

-of even better leave your comments via email

-if you want professional writing, buy a book. This site is usually the work of

non-writers and for many of us English grammar is a foreign tongue.

Lighten up and submit your own work under you name/nom de plume and let us see what kind of storyteller you are.

and why the fuck anyone from the UK should try to write as if he was from the USA is totally beyond my understanding. Be proud of your own culture, silly wee laddie.

To the wankers with the complaints, go buy a book.

To badstudent69 keep it, and thank you

3* for effort, please don't give up, but PLEASE get an editor if you plan on submitting more.

...check out "Nothing Between Us" by M-Y Erotica. It's on the "Top Stories" list for First Time.

Great story Bad Student!

Your storyline grabbed this female reader!! I felt a surge of warm gitters travel up my legs as I imagined being Lana. One of the best I've read in awhile. I also read another author who, with your permission wrote a similar story with her own twist. Your version gave me the phyisical effect

thats alot like me and amanda we wree friends long time we went out with group of people no bf gf thing we all went to a drivein because a few of us had never been to one we didnt realize it was x rated film amanda was naieve and nervous i stayed with her we all mde fun of the actors but then a few guys said every girl has to imitate what they are seeing on the screen or there is no ride home Amanda had never seen or touched a cock

As is the case with your other contribution, poor writing, poor grammar and poor punctuation makes this story hard to read. Most of your sentences are "run on" and should be broken up into two or three individual sentences. Learn when to use a comma and when to use a period.

Sorry, but try as I might, I just can't wade through a story that is written so poorly.

Wow, a whole lot of whining for a story from a non-professional writer. Agree the writing, sentence structure and punctuation could improve with some editing. So what, many people write as they speak, which I took it this to be the case with Badstudent69. If that's the case, so who cares, not everyone has a college education or a degree in English Lit. to back up their writing ability. Even with the aforementioned punctuation issues Badstudent69 is a story teller, something which many masters of punctuation frequently fall short.

I really liked your story, it was sweet, tender, not overly raunchy, allowed the reader to paint the pictures in their mind. I related to your characters, I met my husband at four years old, he was a mature five. We soon became fast friends, now thirty some years later we're still each other's best friend and spouse. Our own first time began much like you characters, everyone but us could see our love for each other except us. Thanks for a good story and a trip down memory lane. Oh, yes I sort of write the way I speak too; maybe that's why I liked your story.

Steffie