All Comments on 'Mother and Daughter Bond Ch. 02'

I like chapter one but this one failed to live up to it. It felt rushed and the other was well thought out. It also struck me with the lack of shock and suspense. I know the big one was the first sexual encounter but adding more unforced surprises would have made for a more pleasurable read. Keep writing! Like the storyline over all, just a critique or two to make the next chapter as good as the first!

I can’t disagree with you. I have been so excited about writing this series, and hundreds of ideas floated through my head. Unfortunately, every draft I came up with was not what I wanted. I couldn’t seem to figure it out. In reality, this could have sufficed as a 1.5 part, rather than a ‘chapter 2’. For an entire year, I would write, erase, go back, and repeat. I didn’t take the appropriate steps in writing to try and showcase patience with the characters. I have been working on chapter three, and I think (hope) I will be able to bring life and development back to mother and Ally. Appreciate your feedback. :-)

Mom and daughter dvelop their lust for each other

Stroking

looking forward to more, yes it is a little fast, but your hitting all the right places, in my mind, i have my visual now of them, what they look like, and all, so keep it going please??