All Comments on 'Mother and the Book Club'

Ace story from start to finish. Expected him to be with his mum before you sneaked April into the mix. Now its tailor made for more chapters i hope with both women.

Great story to read particularly with the prospect of more to come?? I hope

Haven't read any other stuff by this writer, but surely he is trying to take the piss.

The bits about eating "meet" and where it comes from, and a father and daughter standing lip-locked for 15 minutes in a street 20 minutes away from their home and outside a hotel they have just checked out of. Nah! It's a the result of a bet to see what crap you could get published.

It was a nice story from start to finish. The misspellings or incorrect word usage are fairly common in stories on this site. It will be interesting to learn the interplay between April and his mother. One other interesting point: Why is "impregnate" a story tag? Maybe it will become apparent in the next chapter.

Your steady momentum with developing these characters added to my enjoyment. No one simply showed up and began groping.

There is ample information remaining out there for two more chapters and I wonder about the significance of Cindy.

I read this story while enjoying a cold drink. As much as these characters seem to drink, they should have to pee all the time.

I have read most of the stories submitted by this author and enjoyed them all. THIS STORY IS BY FAR THE POOREST WRITTEN I HAVE READ IN YEARS. You need to do a chapter2 but PLESE get an editor. One that knows the difference between there and their, meet and meat and an & and.

Way too redundant.

While I thought the story was plausible and was trying my best to follow the twists, I found there to be too much unnecessary narrative. For example, you repeated the same information over and over - "flogging a dead horse" syndrome. You ABSOLUTELY need help with grammar, spelling, sentence structure and proof-reading. Those things would have helped this story immensely. I just lost interest and became frustrated at the end of the third page. 2 Stars

Written as if English was your second language.

Great story, good clear character development but spelling and grammer needs looming at. {As does a lot of writers on this site}

I think it's a good start. I look forward to future chapters.

I enjoyed the basic storyline. However, I found myself re-reading several passages to understand what you were really trying to convey. Your grammar, punctuation and sentence structure all need some work. A good editor would solve this for you as well as make the story flow better.

I agree with Ilovemymother great story, hope you write some more of this story. You got my family talking about the story.

Love Annie

The story has promise, yet your writing technique is greatly lacking. Would have stopped on the second page if my interest in seeing the mom and son hook up hadn't stopped me, and then you add April, why? It seems like halfway through you switched focus. April would have made a good chapter 2 not thrown in at the end of it, and still nothing with the mom. I could deal with the poor writing if you stayed on point, but well... this is what we got. Maybe you've improved since this story has been out, I hope so, but I won't hold my breath.

I have to agree with soul71 you started out with promise though it was a little hard to read but switched focus even after having him say all those things to his mom like she's the only 1 he wants then you bring the ex mom into the middle of everything then it's like he totally forgot all about his mom this first part wasn't incest it was muture I'm going to see what part 2 is like but not holding my breath that's any better and taken back to the original focus point