All Comments on 'Mother-In-Law Apartment'

Great story. I hope this is not the end.

I agree with rebolz , hope there's a chapter two !

I don't understand why he would run? Nobody except the bouncer knew he was even at the club. I would have stayed in the area and watched the home and see if somebody is looking for him.

great story ! there has to be a second part ?

Good story. Hate the abrupt ending.

A really good story but the ending begs for a part two. 4*.

Not much of a plot. Guy on the run, stumbles into becoming a sex toy, then gets back on the run again. With so many illegal immigrants getting phony ID's and work papers it shouldn't be a problem for him to disappear into the immigrant community. They are not all Hispanic, he could be Ukrainian or something.

That was the most interesting cuck story that I’ve ever read. Al performed pretty damn good for a 60 plus year old fellow too.

Not the best category for what it was, but an okay story. Well, up until the point you just stopped writing it.

Was this written by a fourteen year old.?

Explanation for infosauger:

The bouncer being the bouncer was, of course, a trusted employee of a mob owned and operated business. He had let Al in and had told him to stay in the back. If the bouncer had a lick of sense, the first thing he would do when shots rang out would be to tell the rest of the gang in the club that an untrusted worker was in the club. That’s why Al heard shots and shouts as he was scrambling up the opposite bank of the creek.

Great story. Deserves to be a series.

Really not a bad story, even if the ending is missing. You could have cut away from the scene at the club and have Ruth replace daughter when she goes to college. You already got hubby and MC friendly so push suspension of belief a bit further and have just one big happy family. You didn't gain a thing by bring in the mob.

Thanks for the read. 4 stars! cd