All Comments on 'Mother in the Dark'

However, the typo "dakness" for "darkness" breaks the mood, because it is an inherently funny word. The occasional germanisms aren't really a problem. But the vocative form is "fili mei"!

i realy dont get it. 3 pages of getting to it and then 3 paragraphs of action. i still dont know if he just dreamt it or not. whats all this shit about marduk all of a sudden.

started out rather good, epic fail in the end.

Background info which falls into the category of (TMI) - too much info. It is not a contest to max out the number of words on the page. Way too much useless buildup.

It is very confusing for quite a long time then the sex comes and is over before it began....rewrite....rewrite...rewrite.

What some posters below don't understand is this is a tale of darkness. There's a tale in your intorspection that sets a great stage for the climax and that foreshadows the conclusion. It is short.

Ah, for Marduk...do these heathen not know the terrors of Halloween, or All Saint's Eve? Pity.

The writings of an NPD (one with narcissistic personality disorder). This was uncomfortable to read.

Posted one day ago and already over 32,000 views? That's quite a fan club you have.

The build up was kind of unnecessary but ultimately the story took its own reality. I am still very confused on the whole thing but it was a great story.

Nope!!!!!

This was long as fuck, so long in fact, that by the time I reached the "action", my boner had gone away ☹️

Weird one indeed

Well... seems like this is some kind of ancients gods coupling...the old gods demand this mother son sacrifice.... unsure but seems like it... not altogether bad but unusual

Someone needs to put the kid out of his misery!