All Comments on 'Mothers and Daughters Pt. 11'

Incomplete editing cost the story a star. Some sentences are garbled. In one place Martha is called Brianna.

“Fuck hole“ - like “fuck stick” - is OK if the context is right, but becomes distasteful quickly. So does all the fingering without effect. In fact, most of the sex is rather lifeless. Perhaps much of this is because it is either payment or punishment, but for this reader it is mostly boring. This could have been substantially relieved if the ending had been different. As it is, despite all the effort to show that the protagonist is fair, morally correct, and so very highly accomplished, the net result is that the comparatively weak and garbled “girls” are correct, he really is an asshole. Although the ending makes technical sense, the story as a whole could have been significantly lifted if it had continued, still in a BDSM mode, but with a different context for Martha now that Brianna was free.