All Comments on 'Mouthwatering Maria'

I enjoyed your story ut was well written.there were two reasons i gave it a 75 instead of a 100.first yo only gave maria bust and cup size not her waist and hips nor did you mention maria mom'rosa nor joyce or joan measurements.overall it was good.you hit all the true ways girl does girl strap on's as well as fingers and tongue. most writters think of just oral.next time give all your characters measuremenrs and i'll give you a 100

Lee,

As usual you managed to capture the readers and put them right where the action is. As for measurements, etc...Im not that fussy...the content, use of dirty talk, etc, are where it's at! Another awesome story babe!

Your # 1 Fan!

Steve

...ridiculous cliches, and slang. Leave writing to educated people and stick to comic books.

This story is all over the place. Try not to involve quite so many characters and scenes. Keep writing, and you will improve!

I loved every mouthwatering morsel of this epic tale. Keep writing, I love seconds...

very good story it was enjoyed

The complete change in Joan was wonderful !!! Please continue with MORE!!!!!!!!!

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Almost too much of a good thing!