All Comments on 'Moving Day'

Needs editing. Otherwise it was enjoyable.

Just another winner, i wonder in these stories if the guys are so wonderful why can't they get their own women, what a loser.

Please do not just use spellchecker as it does not catch "brake" instead of "break" or "know" instead of "no" as examples of the annoying problem in this story.

Enough said. Hubby needs a lobotomy. Wife needs to sew it closed

More, Please. Very Hot!

that a husband would choose to share his wife without some "set up" for their adventure. Her reaction could end their marriage or turn her to becoming a slut for any man.

The story does need an editor.

First time I've given story writing a go and I punched it out pretty quickly. Reading it a few days on and it's pretty clear I could use an editor or at least some better proof reading. All comments good/bad welcome. This is of course pure fiction

That is good enough to give a dead man a hard on.

For some reason I missed the grammatical, spelling and any other mistakes.

Keep writing----- please

Too unbelievable. To work, fantasies have to have some connection to the real world and this one just doesn't cut it. With work to do, no woman would come out of her room in anything but clothes appropriate for the expected activities. I can't think of how ANY woman would even possibly put herself into that position, especially with a guy she really doesn't like very much and a complete stranger. And then the "loving" husband starts up with the "whore", "slut" and "cunt" thing. Once she thinks about it, there will be inevitable consequences. Payback may take a while, but it certainly won't be pleasant.

The best new work this side of 2012 so far... will be gravely disappointed and will definitely stalk you if you don't continue writing...

Ps. Don't let the haters win those fags couldn't satisfy their wifes if they were married to Aphrodite reincarnated.

PPs. gave it a 5 wish it could be more :)

This was either the fantasy of a horny wife or the slick undertaking of an asshole who shares his wife.

Either way, DREAM ON mother fuckers.

HA

a fat cock smoked, buggered by the meaty cock, betrayed!

And we have a real cuckold jerk off story winner, the worst so far in 2012, 1 star for wrong category.

More Please. I would love to be pounded by three guys.

Cuck shares whore with a dumb black dildo.

26thNC nailed it.