All Comments on 'Moving In with Mom Pt. 01'

This dribble Drabble style of story telling makes you want to throttle the author not follow them. Complete the story. Pervs come here to read and flog the log not read poetry (there is a section for that) or long drawn out romance. Get on with it for Christmas sakes.

What part of Pt. 01 was too hard for you to understand?

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Now, I can see such an attitude when the story ends with something such as "To Be Continued" but there's no chapter or part number, but ThatDamnCat put did that to warn it wasn't a complete story.

This is meant constructively as I know how hard it is to write well. Its ok to set the scene a bit but you need to give a lot more than this. If you havent written it all yet then wait until you have before publishing more.

Not much story. I've always thought bleached blond was a cheap look, like trailer trash sluts...

Great beginning of a natural attraction to a beautiful lady who just happens to be mom. We've all had that "Aha moment" , many with our sainted mothers.

Hope there's more, it's ok so far but seems to be hotting up

Great start but I give this 3 stars for it not actually getting anywhere and for it being way to short

I like a bit of setup, makes for a better story in my opinion. We don't ALL come here to flog the log.

Why would I read your stories in the future if I now you're going to leave me hanging?

I always laugh at the creeps that think porn is every thing. It's as fake as the stories on this web site! LOL!!!

This is some #1 crap, a real turd of a story, stick to jerking off to the Sear catalog!

You need to set you hook in the readers mind sooner. First three or four paragraphs but you have a good start. Do not listen to the jump your bones in the first two sentences guys. Tell a story not a hand crank tale.

This had a promissing start but didnt really go anywhere. Finish it up and give us the rest. Does he ever get with his mom. Does it end with life long incestuous love or ???

Way to dragged out