All Comments on 'Moving to the Suburbs'

I really hope there's more of this. The characters are amazing. Crafted brilliantly, thank you.

It's stories have a strong sense of place, usually East Kent. You genericised your locations, probably would have been stated to have omitted context entirely. Also, I need to check, but I seem to remember it being hard to find Pern novels in the UK. Mi by

That was a great fun read!! Thanks.

I enjoyed the story. I liked the characters and the dialogue. I hope they will continue to experience and discover each other in more chapters. Thanks for your time and imagination.

A very interesting combination of character development. I like where you’re going with this and I’d encourage you to add at least a 2nd chapter😈

Well done, and I hope you continue. The characters are all fun, and I would like to read more about them.

One small point threw me off a bit. Vicky leaves the train before his stop every day, but on the outbound when they are to meet up she is already on the train when he boards. Not a major issue, of course, just a bit of a stumbling block.

This is such an example of a story line that could really continue and hopefully it shall!! Superbly written, enjoyable and a nice touch of possible reality.

BRAVO!!!

ag207: Pern novels are available in the UK, new and secondhand.

As for location? That doesn't matter. The Morris van was more than enough.

Thanks for a good read.

Obviously Melbourne, outer suburbs cause there's no trams involved. As I'm a northerner that's all I can come up with. Love the story, the pace and the atmosphere. Had me looking at hotted up minors for a bit! Thanks

Now that was a fun read. A slow (sort of) romantic build and then some off the wall crazy room mates who have all sorts of interesting house rules. I agree with another post, there is all sorts of potential for more adventures for this foursome, or is it foresome?

Thanks for the comments, particularly from Oggbashan. I’m glad you liked it.

Just a couple of things. Vegemite on the table should be a clue about where the story is set, and, well, I was thinking of the Melbourne rail loop for the travel. Lol... I didn’t mention that because the direction reverses through the day. Didn’t think of any other inconsistency. Oh well...

The best part is that it looks perfectly natural to read them...

This was well written, and humorous. Don't understand why the rating isn't higher. Also don't understand the comment about Kent below - where are there penguin parades in Kent?

This was like reading two different stories. One was this shy sparring on the train and the other this outrageous interaction with Vicky's roommates. Not sure I liked the combination. It may account for the comment about the low rating of the story. I gave it a 3* because of the inconsistency of the tone of the tale and the apparent mismatch between the characters we meet at the beginning and what they all become at the end.It was a pleasant read - it had to be to get through 5 pages where so little happens. (And why was it called: "Moving to the Suburbs"?)

A little bit schizoid, what with the gentleness of the first half and then a reset button gets pushed once Tony got to the strange group house.

But do I care? No, coz little Vicky was cute and hot both at the same time, and what's not to like about a true redhead with curtains and drapes?

and to the person that complained about the difference in Vicky's personality I didn't find that all strange-after all, what is that 'saying' about a lady in public and a tramp in the bedroom (or something along those lines)?

more please needs more chapters

Freckled redheads... my obsession

Please let us know what happens next

Get used to it. 4* are uncommon and 5* are very, very rare. I’ll give you 5* to try and make up for it.

This is a test post, but I do have a couple of ideas.

Too many ideas, not enough time...

i really wish there was something between 4 and 5 stars. Great writing, really good story, but i don't particularly like the rather forceful and early introduction of extras. nonetheless, I'd love to read more of Vicky and Tony's adventures.

I like your characters and am in awe of your talent. Wish I knew people like them in real life. Thank you and keep writing.

Yes it was good to read "we're slugs for stats "first then "moving to the suburbs". The continuity worked perfectly and each is a good story in its own right. As I've said elsewhere I do like a bit of humour with my sex.

I shall go on to read more of your stuff. Thanks for those I have already read.

Entertaining story but difficult to connect the Vicky in the beginning of the story with the Vicky in the end who really new her way around a cock and had been a spinner with multiple men.