by velvet hammer
By the "rules" of erotic fiction, this story ought to be a total failure. But it isn't; it is downright HOT. Once it gets started, it's disgustingly predictable. And it's so laughably implausible, it's rediculous. But it's a fine piece. I think what makes it work is that the beginning, with the names (what was it?, Johnny Buzzcock and the Purple Helmet Warriors) and the set-up, lets the reader know that it's just a funny little piece of fluff. And thus, it comes off as an excellent contribution. It's entertaining, humorous, and erotic.
It had humor and lots of sex. What a mom Mrs. Hanson turned out to be! Nice read!
After he has fucked Joy, the mother 4 different times in a late afternoon, and he is going to take her daughter to the Prom later that evening? Maybe.....but you really ruined this story when you had Joy telling him to not cum in her when he was fucking her pussy. With the fucking she was allowing him to do, why would he want to have anything to do with her daughter? Joy would have probably been quite ample for him, and he could have made a baby with her and continued fucking her to make more siblings for that baby. They would have possibly gone on in a relationship and the daughter been brought into the relationship after her Joy has having his babies in the future.
You need to think out your fantasy stories and write them a little better.
gonna be Susie's best boyfriend... and teacher's pet to boot. there's something to be said for maturity. wish i could find my own "johnny".
I really appreciated your story.Hot and humorous, and erotic as anything. Write on!
GREAT WRITING, GREAT STORY AND FANTASY, BUT NEXT TIME PLEASE MORE BREASTPLAY.
Love her sexy outfit at school.. Hope you continue the story with her daughter wearing nylons, garter belt and high heels under her sexy prom dress. Also have mom greet him at the door wearing a pleated black mini skirt and seamed nylons held up by a garter belt. There's so many more stories you can do to continue this hot story
Good story....nicely written...so it was predictable....who cares? It was hot.
OK not much of a story-line but great writing. Fast and furious
Way to go Johnny! getting some? Good pussY form an older. AND HOT woman. Maybe you can fuck her daughter next