by Many Feathers
I liked this a lot. Only wish you had drawn it out a bit more. How about part two?
I found the story and the story telling to be very enjoyable! And there were only eight I's in the first two paragraphs. Please keep on writing!
... is innumerate! The first two paragraphs have the word "I" 8 times, not 25. This is a lovely tender story of long-awaited consummation, very different from the usual teacher-pupil story.
Decent enough story idea but sophmoric. I think the first two paragraphs had the word "I" 25 times. Edit?