by ilove2write4u
'Not an english major , were you ?' people like you are annoying as hell. the minor grammatical errors are not enough to detract from the story. do you come here to get off or act like a know it all? of course you leave it anonymous as well so the author can not even respond. at least have the guts to put your name on a negative comment.
good start, but too short. there should be some more chapters coming!