All Comments on 'Mum's Friends Ch. 05'

I'm sorry, I've really tried with these, but they are truly awful. Sentance's no longer than about ten words, formative, repetative and almost child like. Please, please no more, have you not wondered why there are so few comments to your postings.987A

The whole series is very poorly written and I couldn't read the whole series from start to finish. Try taking a creative writing course so that you can improve your technique.

I'm sorry if this is harsh, but I had to vote this only one star.

In one paragraph, you have the name Paul 8 times and May 7 times. The readers already know the characters, there is no requirement to constantly identify them by name. Take out the excess wording, especially the names, and combine the sentences of similar thoughts/actions.

Hair not bald.

Woman vs girl

Worried about hair?

Should be combing through with fingers as foreplay.

Scent better with hair.

Fisting!

Sooner or later stretched out won't feel it when insert dick.