All Comments on 'Mum's Still Got It Ch. 01'

Great story, can't wait for Ch 2

Let him give her the babies she always wanted!

The latent attract is often there but it's the events that make it covert

As a wise Englishman once said

"Events dear boy, events"

I’ll try to be constructive in my criticism. The general story line was good, if a little slow. The choppy sentences were somewhat distracting. It reads more like a newspaper article than a novel. Try to more descriptive, and to join sentences with and, but, before, and similar words.

I see possibilities, and the more you write, the better you’ll get.

Good luck,

Tc

I too look forward to the next chapter.

I would love to see the son in pregnant his mother but at 50 years old it might take some doing. Now had she been 40 years old there might be some hope.

Write an interesting story that doesn't rely on a 'monster cock' tag to make it successful. If you can.

Continue.

Great story so far. More please.

FTDS. Agree that the sentences are too short, it's hard to read.

Keep going. You have my attention.

I'm really looking forward to chapter two.

Okay not a bad start hopefully the next chapter is longer

Like the story a lot. AAAA++++

Pathetic

Liked the story but where's the incest??? 4 stras