All Comments on 'Murder in Magnolia'

Mundane story, heard (some variation of) it many times before. Get a dictionary and look up the word 'Lose' and the word 'Loose'— they are NOT interchangable. A lot of the story is rather flat (read: boring,) narrative, and the dialog needs help.

Sorry to seem so critical, but if you really want to improve your work...

rocks and is a great jerk off story!

Things like that used to happen in small towns everywhere that were controlled by just a few families: My grandfather was killed because he was Castilian Spanish and he married the daughter of one of those families against the family's wishes. They claimed it was a robbery but, none of his money or his watch was taken. Then They tried to claim it was suicide but it was impossible because if him being shot in the back of the head since all he carried was a long barrel Colt. As was often the case nothing was ever done about it.

A good editor/proofreader is needed very much. Bad grammar, spelling and punctuation makes for a very poor read.

de Jay

Meh, a "paint by the numbers" story which is ridiculous and unrealistic. No one would come forward with the knife after 15 years. People in real life don't have consciences.