by m_storyman_x
Can't wait for the next chapter. Maybe a little incest thrown in for good measure with Jase fucking his mom or sister or both.
I love your stories and find them hot and arousing. I feel like you left us hanging at the end of this chapter. Can't wait for more. Thanx again for all your submissions.
lolwut???. Incest is by far, the most popular fetish category on here. It would be fuckin' hot.
really busy, but it worked out ok, good characters and hot sex nicely written-thanks
more please, especially if Scot and Jase double team the neighbour (and possibly the other ladies)
This is has all the signs of a great series.
My only concern/advice, would be to develop the characters more as people. I know nothing about any of these people other than their physical descriptions and sexual prowess.
i.e. What is Scottie studying? What does Mrs. K do for a job? What is the sister like as a person?
Apart from that small concern, this is fantastic. Well done.
I would suggest not trying 2 push Jason with his mom or sister just yet, though it would definitely work for later chapters. Also, don't rush too many other characters, rather build the relationship a little more. Whether that's dom/sub or more emphasis on casual flings is ur choice. A cuckolding scene also seems in order. This is a GREAT series so far, and could include so many different kinks. Please update ASAP
One of the trends I do not understand is for an author to spend the time to build characters in a first chapter and then abandon those characteristics in the next.
Scottie was shy, reticent, reluctant, fairly unsophisticated but teachable in Ch 01. Yet in Ch 02 he is suddenly a sexual master and has a powerful personality. Missus K has remorse, is very reluctant to move further, and seems to hold back in Ch, 01. And then in Ch. 02 she starts recruiting the ladies of the neighbourhood to sample the prowess of Scottie, and her son.
What happened to the build, the added tension, the discovery?
You've got a few stories that your readers are looking for additional chapters or for you to wrap them up. Be kind to your loyal fans. Read this one a few times now and it's always good. Hoping for more.
Not a fan of Tina being so indiscriminate, kinda ruined the fantasy for me that she also seems interested in Jase
nother time simple basic fuck is wonderful. I have no idea why.
I suppose it's kind of like real life. Had that thought as I typed, honest.
Either way thank you.
I agree that you need to write more on this story. I can already "feel" a five way orgy developing! Jason, Scott, Linda, Tina and Amy all naked around the pool with every conceivable combination of sexual interaction. Love to hear about Tina seducing Amy and having Scott "catch" them.
Great story, told well.
Dude, you need to add another chapter to this story. Time for Mrs. K and Jase to start bumping hips. I know that the last chapter was done over 5 years ago but you're still writing and this is a hot fucking story!
Cant wait until you right more. Hear more about the sexy ladies & their adventures.
Cool sex scenes, pretty hot. Needs more of a story and definitely more Amy.