All Comments on 'My Best Friend's Son Ch. 01'

She needs to arrange to get his cock in her cunt on a regular basis. It would be fun if they could arrange to somehow manage to spend a weekend together

The next time they get together -- and they will -- let's hear more about Jake. Yes, he's got a seven inch cock, but how about a good dusting of hair for that sexy and manly body -- hairy chest, thighs, abs, forearms. Give Margaret something to caress, taste, run her fingers through and across. Let's turn Jake on and let them GO!

It was sexy, kind of quick but not bad. What was bad was your grammar, spelling and sentence repeats. You really need an editor.

It's a decent story with promise of more in the future BUT you need a proof reader because the composition of the story has a lot of repetitious lines like maybe you were thinkng about you & Margaret?

It was hurried, maybe slow it down in the next chapter, otherwise good.

Would be glad to proof anything for you.

You could have had told of some contact with the woman in your life before the bathroom involvement.

Cant wait for the next chapter

Thank you all for your feedback. Looking for anyone willing to proof read before publishing next chapter.

Jake is right this should not be a one-time thing.....cause he knows you are a good fuck.....& you need a lover like him....continue with the story & spend a weekend with him....fucking

This could have been good, but I was distracted by the spelling errors, missing words and the repeat sentences.

Definitely use the proof readers available. But don’t give up.

Looking forward to the next submissions. Thanks for the read.

Why do people have to write about errors instead of just enjoying the story. I will never know. Look forward to your continue chapters.

It's a good story I hope you continue to write.

Jim

Thank you for your positive feedback on my work. Big fan of yours. Can't wait to read what you do next :)

Hope you will add the next chapter. You sound like a firecracker in bed! Looking forward to more stories from you. Is this a true story or a fantasy?

Young guys will bang anything with a vag.

Great

I like your story but there are a few minor issues with it. Several times you doubled up on a sentence, nothing major. Some of your ideas needed to be fleshed out a bit more. For example, what the name of Jake's mother? I'm guessing she might factor into the story based on your last few sentences so it would do well to have a name. Little things like that.

Keep up the good work and I hope to see an update soon!

An improvement over your Grandma story but you still need to be more descriptive. You also repeated several sentences in your story. Hope you update this soon!

Time for round 2!

You didn't even bother to proofread this? What kind of a jerk post something like that?