by sweetk1sses
I love best friend stories! Who didn't have that one friend that you wished could have been more, right? Pretty good for your first effort, would have rated it a bit better if it had have been fleshed out with a bit more background and plot though. But keep up the good work!
Definitely written by a girl for girls, and I liked it. Is it perfect? No. But is it a great place to start? Absolutely. Good job, I hope you keep writing.
good for a first time and would probably be better if it's a series! keep writing. :)
Aww this was very cute! I think we could have a chapter two! Ooh please more and soon! Cant wait! Thanks!!
I hope you are planning on adding more parts to this! It was great!
an easy read that flowed well and stayed focused without getting lost in too many words. good balance of excitement and angst along with romance.
An excellent first story. It's a simple and sweet topic that worked for you. As others have asked, I hope there is a chapter 2.
A great first chapter for romance--can't wait to read more of your sweet style!
Make the best lovers! I've been with my highschool best friend for OMG...17 yrs now! lol I believe everyone does have a best friend that they loved once, and it is always nice to hear about the ones that are brave enough to go for it!
Nice start, take your time and don't rush the flow. A few minor grammar errors but nothing glaring. Good job!
Your story is great. I enjoyed it. Tips to make it amazing: 1. Fix the grammar-a good editor is an invaluble asset. 2. I think your characters need to be more developed. Elaborate on their personalities. It makes the story more intimate and personal
Firstly, good story and great beginning. While I agree you probably need an editor, who doesn't after all, I don't remember anything glaringly off or anything that made me go back and read over. Either way I loved it and keep it up.
You have to add on to this story. this was awesomly cute. please, add some more. :)
i am in love with my best friend, and waiting for him to fall in love with me back. this is my favorite story.
And now I'm waiting for the rest of the story. Give us more, sweetK! Spring break is over and exams will be finished soon. Don't keep us waiting too long!!!
WTF
Honestly, I can't find it anywhere in this story.
What a great, realistic, cute story.
None of the hot hunks and too-sexual content.
And you're a pretty good writer.
Very much appreciated!
Definately the start of something great, please dont stop! I will watch for more, looking forward to it.
ZB
Best story i have ever read. Made me feel like my own experiences. I want this to happen to me :)
Great bloody story :)
Thank you very much. You really touched me. Please write more about
these two
This is a great beginning and I hope not the end. Sometimes the right person has been right in front of you the entire time and I love these kinds of stories.
This terrefied me. My best friend's name is Mike, and I'm in love with him. It really got me, and I loved it. Keep writing.
Continue please. It's irritating to get excited about a new great story just to find out then that it's not finished!!! :( It's been long
Great job with this story. I haven't check but if there isn't, there should be more to this story.
It's been about 10 years....surely there is another chapter lurking around in your creative mind. Great start, great story, it definitely needs to be finished!
I didn’t like how he was being so forceful, but he made it all better when he left to sleep alone in the end.