All Comments on 'My Big Futa Sister Ch. 01'

I can't wait to read more. Very interesting subject..

I get the set up. I like where it's going. I would consider trying a different bend on this kind of story. Almost every single one has dick girls turning boys into their cum buckets, maybe try having your protagonist being more of a girly girl instead of the alpha dog, put her huge schlong in everything she kind kind of futa. It would make your storyline unique.

there will be more i hope good story i am impatient to see what happens next

Hey all, thanks for reading my story, I'm surprised it's getting as much praise as it is seeing that writing stories hasn't really ever been a strong suit of mine but thought I'd give it a shot anyway. Anyways, I do have Ch. 02 done but I'll post that in a couple days at most then story chapters will be once a week at the longest. Thank you again

I like allison but I would like to see her with a girl or several.

You should work on your habit of using run-on sentences. Your writing is fine, except that each sentence is missing any clarifying punctuation. Other than that your writing is quite good.

I think this is a good start, it's only the introduction to the characters, so with that said it's a bit on the small side, I'd recommend having the story chapters anywhere between 2-4 if you can. I think I know where this is going, but surprise me if I'm wrong, I guess. I don't need to see Alison with another lady, I can see that there will be some serious voyeurism going on early on. If you intend to make this a slow burn I don't think that's really necessary for this kind of futa-on-male story.

I really like the setup, would love to see sequels. xoxo

Love the setup. Can’t wait for more chapters!

I agree with everything said so far. Good setup, interesting characters and motivations. Your writing is alright, just rushed. Take your opening sentence for example - it should have been three paragraphs, not just one big jumble of information. Keep at it, I think you'll have plenty of readers.

As the title says great start, bit short but I agree with most what has been said.

Can't wait to see more from you and this story

Now let’s see if you can pick up the spare.

I look forward to the next chapter.

Chapter 2 is now up

Decent start to a story but not very well written I'm afraid.

Was surprised you didn't go further with it, if you know what I mean. Its a good start though. Please expand on the story. I was really looking for it to go a lot further

If you was to make the store just as interesting as the thing everyone wants you could expand on some of the vague family details.

It's "pales in comparison" not "fails in comparison"