All Comments on 'My Brown Eyed Girl Pt. 01'

Your story telling skill is brilliant. I felt engaged with the story from the start and feel like i already know Melissa and Jodie.

Now i firmly believe in being able to change own wheel, but this may be the exception .

Im hooked

I havent heard skedaddle in years. The dialogue between these two is great

5 big stars for you . carnt wait for chapter 2

. . . life in the Appalachians, and the story background seemed too real. Did you experience this in real life?

Of course, a real life lesbian date would be better in Morgantown than Charleston. WVU and all that.

You're doing it again, Shaima, and it's what you do best, ie setting up a story with real and interesting people in real situations. The story is looking very promising and I hope we don't have to wait too long for the next part. Loved the one-liners about Gay Ethel (I thought "...falling from the ugly tree..." couldn't be beaten until I read "...even the toothbrush curls up...") Five stars to kick off with and we'll see how it goes from there.

I'm looking forward to the next installment.

Hopefully don't have to wait to long.

I loved this first chapter!

Was a really great read! Build up is really important, so I'm glad youre taking time to do that :) can't wait for more chapters, but until then I'll have to check out your other stories!

Please let me know when there is more, im J by the way

J xxx

I love that you are sharing your writing talent with us😁. I’m so looking forward to the next chapter 😃. Don’t make us wait to long

You have the WV accent down love it

And I'm eagerly awaiting chapter 2. Thank you for sharing this with us!

I’m looking forward to seeing more of this! Thank you!

Love it. Did very well with the characters, Melissa is a cutie.

Loving it. When will we be able to read part 2?

Melissa's still not someone I would turn away, and not just because I can't change a tire but because she sounds like someone I wouldn't be able to take my own eyes off of. Great introduction and interaction. No way these two will remain just "friends" and looking forward to the moment that happens.

Hallo Shaima32!

I'm very partial to one brown-eyed cowgirl from Georgia.... Jackie, my wife,,, yes!

But I have to agree with Bridget69!.... Melissa, sounds like someone I wouldn't be able to take my eyes off of either.... I'm looking forward to the moment when Melissa has her first "real" orgasm, and I mean the level of orgasm she could only achieve with another woman!

Thank-you.... 5-Stars and 5-Hot Orgasms, :-) 😍

Gay Kat.

"You don't want Ethel, trust me, even a toothbrush curls up when it sees her teeth."

The best line I`ve heard in YEARS, and sadly Ive got plenty of years behind me :)

Not the only funny line in the story, but certainly the best.

Off to a good start, great descriptions, fantastic and natural interactions and possible brilliant future storylines :)

alexwatson62@aol.com

Carey Thomas found one of her stories ripped off on Amazon. I took a look of other stories by "Amara Boone." "My Browned Eyed Girl" has also been clipped, although the sole comment (5*) thinks it ended abruptly and is awaiting what happens next. This "author" has been reported to Amazon, but you can make a comment on this story as the copyright holder.

https://www.amazon.com/MY-BROWN-EYED-GIRL-Lesbian-ebook/dp/B07V7SFRPR/ref=sr_1_15?keywords=Amara+Boone&qid=1578840805&sr=8-15

The ebullient innocence of Melissa’s character thru clever use use of dialogue lifts this story to 5 stars for me.

Really well done

Perfect start .... As always in a fabulous writing art

I agree about the dialogue. Their back and forth, crackles and pops. Lively and entertaining. What’s not to like?