All Comments on 'My Daughter Massage'

I love the Father and Daughter stories. Especially love this story.

Can't wait for the 3 threesome massage.

The premise is good, but you really need to get an editor. Grammar and spelling really distract from the story.

Loved the story premise, however the composition and grammar were such that I couldn’t give more than 3 stars. The tense kept shifting, subjects and verbs didn’t agree and there were many misspellings. A couple examples below:

”She has been having back spasm on and off and they can’t find nothing.” - that’s a double negative. You want to say can’t find anything.

“I did and to my surprise she was wearing just a small tongue.” - I’m guess she was wearing a small thong.

I only provide this feedback since you appear to want to write more and seem interested in getting good ratings. Definitely make use of the volunteer editors before posting your next story.

Good luck!

PLEASE DADDY !!!!!! that will do it every time. Good read, chapter 2 would be nice.

THANKS

Good, but needs to be much longer. At least two full pages.

Nice progression of touching that is so realistic. Sexual desire is the next logical step.

The story could have been longer. The biggest problem for me was the grammar, it made it hard to get into the story and in general acted as a stumbling block.

Thoroughly enjoyed this hot story. 5 stars. Deserves more.

Love father daughter stories.