by PapaRomantic
Absolutely beautiful story with superlative prose. ***** The only thing that gave me a little pause was when Kaysie initially showed her shaved pussy to he father prior to going to the party. I felt it didn't quite fit the established scenario. Hope you won the contest though. . . .
I'm a little disappointed that the ending was a Hallmark-worthy moment, yet at the same time, it was anything but the Hallmark moment. I kinda wish Rachel hadn't come back into the storyline. I like your writing style, with an a abundance of description. It got me hot and bothered.