by eva_marie23
I like the surprise first threesome. Nice the way you built up expectations and something else happened. You could really get into more detail and flesh the scenes and thoughts. Thanks.
Your family vacation ended with a bang, eh? Good story. Your narrator is very human and the plot, motivations, and pacing really work well. Sign me up for another chapter.
Excellent story...looking forward to the next chapter! You should fill out your bio...people love to fantasize about the writer!