by atinboone
does the title say? Within the title and first paragraph there were too many errors to bother reading further
10 1/2 inches? Really. What bullshit. Not a great story. Interesting but not great. WAY too much superfluous info. (Altho I have a weakness for redheads) Try again with an experienced editor? Shows promise.
You don't have what it takes for this site yet, but you do have promise.