All Comments on 'My First Hrs. At The Awakening'

Your writing style is head and shoulders above most of what you find on this site, but some proofreeding would make things even better. There are superfluous commas, missing punctuation and a few other minor errors which are a distraction.

then by all means you should be. I came across this story a few months back and have re-read it a few times now, as well as your other stories, and they all feel amazing to read. It's a shame theres no follow up to this, because I'm very much intriqued as to where it's all going. Hopefully you will someone day post the follow up, but I really hope you've gonepro, beause your stuff is VERY well written and shows great potential.

Amazingly hot story and very well written.