All Comments on 'My First Time'

Unappealing. But others may like it.

Very realistic, very hot and well written.

Nicely done!

Very exciting and sexy story. 5 stars.

Nice writing style, good development and tension in the story, very hot. Just great all round, really!

I thoroughly enjoyed that. Five stars from me for a well written and quite believable story.

Loved it. Don't stop now. :-)

"Amy hated parties. No matter how many times one of her friends insisted she go to one she'd never get the appeal. She'd somehow once again let herself get pressured into coming though."

A mixture of past tense and present tense. Instead of using 'coming' you should have stayed in the past tense and used 'going.'

yes. loved it. she was used, and should be again.

wow that totally hit my buttons -- well done.

Yeah, I do mean *that* button.

Really good story, it could do with a follow up though to the visit to Jessica's.