All Comments on 'My First Time with a Married Man'

A perfectly solid erotic story. A spellcheck and grammar check will always improve things. The dialogue was fine in itself but consisted of interactions one has read so many time before - I'd suggest trying to change it into something fresh and original; use turns of phrase that are new and have impact. But it was a hot story, was short and snappy, and I liked the idea of a young, skinny girl being dominated by a powerful, older man. I'd love to see more like this involving your teacher fetish. Thanks for a sexy little story!

I suggest you slow down and add some discription. The story line was good but way too matter of fact. String the story along a little better and maybe you could get 5 stars,

i think it's a wonderfully erotic and sensual story. i could feel your lust, anxiousness, desire, worry and passion! well done...5 stars and keep writing!

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Thank you all so much. I'm going to continue the story so look out for the next chapter in a few days! Enjoy!

its a nice erotic story. thanks for sharing. please describe more about your body, feeling of kissing, sucking,fondling & intercourse. waiting for read your next story

Welcome to Literotica Young_Lust and what a great first submission.

I really felt the passion & sensuality in your writing. Please continue to write for us, I long to read so much more from you. You have a great style.

Jimmy

And then what happened?

I enjoyed this. It was hot and innocent at the same time, if that makes any sense. I hope you write much more!