All Comments on 'My Friend's Daughter Ch. 01'

This is one of the best stories I have read on Literotica since I started reading this web site maybe three or four years ago. The storey, writing and pace is excellent. Some minor editing needs are not significant enough to worry about. Do not douse the flames too soon. More chapters, please.

1)First & foremost, where was Lexi's hymen, nothing was written about her breaking it any # of ways; (curiousity & a carrot/cucumber will break it) 2)nothing was said about him having to slow down to allow her to get used to his size; why? 3)you're going to tell me a virgin was able to take a full-grown man w/o any pain? No way, Jose. 4)the idea that Karen was alright w/this is...STRANGE; there's more but that's enuf 4 now.

A very hot story. Your punctuation is really horrible though. Lack of commas, commas in the wrong places. Things like that. Get that stuff right and you got a 100 rating. As such, you get 75 from me for great effort on the story. Most stories these days really suck but this one is pretty good.

if she were my daughter I would ahve gotten her ass with no lubrication..than pissed on her face and forced her to drink the piss

You desperately need an editor! I couldn't even finish the dang story bc the grammar and punctuation were so terrible. But based on other comments sounds like you had some inconsistencies too. This story could've been so much better (in my opinion) if you had just gotten an editor!