by juanwildone
Cool! Hot!
Great Loving Wives story. Redeem this category, make it your own.
One tiny editing note: around your 21st paragraph, you wrote "Maybe she was still thinking about her beverage, because the sure move would have involved her right hand and - viola - boob covered."
I think you meant to write "voila". Spell check did you dirty. Or did you mean the stringed instrument viola?
as always, enjoy your storytelling... well developed and presented... 5 *'s
Thanks for reading my little tale, and taking the time to comment.
Damn that auto correct, I had every intention of stringing you all along - picked, plucked, strummed, and leave you bowed. I guess it takes a Jazzharp to see the note out of place - wah la - you were right.
This is great A new story, a very good one from an old friend. Nice job and please keep posting new stories.
Wow, 10 years is a long absence. Burning Passion is one of my top 5 ever. It would be much appreciated if you could publish here more often. The category has been taken over by the cucks and the inadequates.
Decent premise.
But what's the rush? He sees her bare boob. Her mouth is wrapped around his mouth. He eats her. They fuck.
Boom!
No foreplay. No buildup, slow or otherwise. Lacks details.
Disappointing.
Three stars.