All Comments on 'My Halloween Fantasy - Eva'

As always a very good read, you surprised me with mom. I was also a bit surprised by the way the party was set up, with all the swapping between everyone.

Matt was the story teller.

Then in the last paragraph you wrote, Matt and Eva told stories to embarrass Matt. I think you meant Mom and Eva told embarrassing stories.

Could not finish the first page. The story had a disjointed flow with the characters mixed up. Needs better character development of who is who. the story had promise but needed better editing.

Great story - needs a continuation in my opinion

You may have had several pages, but you finished it too abruptly at the end. It was a good story that could have used some fleshing *ahem* out. You needed to dial back on some of the dialogue and explain some others. Please keep writing!

"That woman literally blew up into a million pieces". Someone literally doesn't know the definition of the word "literally".

I love your stories. You are one of my favorite authors!