by Misterlzr
Average. Typical adolescent male stroke fodder. Little plot, less character development, nothing to make us care about these characters or what happens next. And really lame sex scenes - disappointing follow-through to what started as an interesting premise.
It's a good story and hope you continue with it. But as for the sex just keep it between the brother and sister!!
I have to agree to LitCrit. Grammar and spelling could also be approved. The topic is interesting, but it's all too short, so there can't be a real development.