All Comments on 'My Little Ventrue Pt. 03 Ch. 12'
by NovusAnimus
- 8 Comments
Anonymousabout 5 years agoOuch! Where are the Moroi, Azerkatil or Khaibit when you need 'em? Great action scene.
Go get em, Jack Gamgee! 5*
NovusAnimusabout 5 years agoAuthorAnon, I get the distinct impression you've read a LOT of Chronicles of Darkness books. :P Making me feel like I need to catch up.
Anonymousabout 5 years agoWhy do you do this to us Novus? :( Just kidding great chapter as always!
Anonymousalmost 5 years agoyou have a definite knack for their individuality and personalities.
Many writers, when starting out writing end up with their characters being too similar.
Likely, your success comes from the goal you state on your bio page; also likely why you notice what is missing in the other formats, you refer to.
FYI: "tracts" is used, in reference to a parcel of land, the sentence you used it in, '...to cover their tracts', should have been 'tracks', as in foot, or paw markings. A tracker would be good at finding obscure markings, or tracks, left by a human, animal or, this case, monster.
Thanks for sharing your vivid imagination, and for all the work it takes to put together a Lit submission.
GeoD
Anonymousover 2 years agoDon’t understand a lot of choices. Like they could have told julias that Fiona and Damian showed right after he called and told him that she hasn’t killed since the meeting. They said he might lock the up. How? Triss has whipped julias ass a few times. Many little choices that don’t make since but guess that the story. It is good work though
Anonymousover 2 years agoNot even a year ago I’m thinking of my sister being stupid for believing in monsters while I’m day dreaming this giant damn monster is trying to kill all of them. What the hell. Don’t care what they are they wont have sweet little memories while thing is fighting them. Oh well just needed gripe a bit
SomethingOfAStrangerover 2 years agoI’ve been absolutely enthralled by this story, and wanted to leave a comment simply saying as much :) Also, it really bummed me out that there was such a consistent negative anon bringing the mood down which isn’t cool. Keep writing! You’re very good and only getting better!
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