All Comments on 'My Little Ventrue Pt. 05 Ch. 03'

Gee, I love this series! Unlike most series, it keeps getting better. I particularly appreciate all the grey areas. Too often characters sink into stereotypes, all black, or all white. Villains unbelievably evil, while heroes become sickeningly saintly.

Dolareido is becoming quite the zoo: Vampires, Werewolves, Begotten, Azlu, the hunters that aren't quite human, Black Blood, unknown spirit realm poker and now lust spirits... Now just waiting for little green men to show up :)

@Sensual It is a zoo. We need some more classic modern punk/goth vampire stuff! Who's writing this silly madness anyway?

@Nthusiastic Thanks! I do try and avoid good/evil good/bad dichotomies.

I love this series and anxiously wait for every chapter. You do an incredible job walking the balance of story and erotica.

As much as I am eager to get each new chapter, I have noticed that the editing has gone down a bit in the last couple of chapters. Missing a word here. The wrong word there. I hope that you will take this as constructive feedback for when you publish the book.

I did not think that I would like this chapter with the hunters, but you have made it about so much more than just the hunters. A masterful job! Being inside the Invictus meeting was a classic scene.

Unfortunately, proofreading is something that will fluctuate depending on many factors. Doing my own editing is a normal part of writing, but a final proofread is supposed to be done by a second person, which I don't have. :(

"But, Avery liked him, far as he could tell, and she wanted to throw him a bone.

For the love of god, don’t make a dog pun out loud."

I'm here cracking up over this 1 line I've said it before and will say it again, publicly this time. I just love how the characters personalities come out so clearly, often in hilarious ways, sometimes in their inner monologue/narration.

Also regarding editing. Hey I'm still here I just don't always get around to reading the chapter immediately when it comes out though I am never sure when you do update the chapters since I rarely go back to see when they get changed.

hello I really love your story it a marvelous piece of story indeed.i have a suggestion can we have anal sex between the prince and Jake it will be lovely to read

I didn't plan on having any anal sex between Jack and the Prince. But it may happen, depending on what my patrons vote for.

The Prince has already said she doesn't really get off on anal sex, but that doesn't mean I couldn't make it work and make it an enjoyable, arousing read.

...I vote for titty-fucking scene instead.