All Comments on 'My Little Ventrue Pt. 06 Ch. 04'

I love this story but this chapter to me is a disappointment. Jack's reaction is far to calm and the fact he is shown talking with everyone at the end like nothing happened is a shame. I feel like this could of been done better. I love this story so i just feel like this was a bit lacklustre but im hopeful this will turn around.

THIS is a Storyteller.

5*

I expected something, but not this....felt like an ok filler chapter. Maybe because it was meant to be longer but was cut?

Just you wait. :3

I have to disagree with Master PD. I saw Jack's reaction to be about what I would expect from him. Once he digests the events, he will let the rage out. It does make me wonder if the grand finale will be Jack's beast taking over. It would be a glorious ending for his meteoric rise.

I was actually glad to see us getting back to the story after all the meaningless sex. Okay, nothing you have written has been meaningless. But I am glad to see things progressing. Jack is right - they gave the hunters too much time to recover.

Jacob is becoming a most interesting character. I think I would like to see his backstory in a spinoff more than Julias or Antoinette.

Well done.

Incest time

Sorry, no incest. Not a kink I write about.

But I incest you to include some incest in this story (get it)

Jack should be locked up. He will get everyone killed. He seems to think he is a fighter and a badass but is very much not from every thing you have written. If you make him into one now then this is the worst story.