All Comments on 'My Little Ventrue Pt. 07 Ch. 23'

Best long story on literotica. The dynamic between Jack and Antoinette is something unique that seperates this novel from others. There is finally a story where the MC isn't the Big Cock Alpha Male but instead an average guy in love with a powerfull woman. I really love your story and hope you keep writing forever. PS: I will drop this if Jack and Antoinette break up.

I feel Antoinette is far to trusting of Elaine and Jack should be even more concerned. I don’t know why but I already hope to see Jack kill off Elaine. I guess because she’s kept secrets for so long and suspect she only showed up to steal the unlocked power of the curse.

I don't want the curse to be removed just saying can u let the curse be lyk Naruto and the nine tail fox different entity but friends lending each other there strength

I would have loved to see Clara hook up with Jack instead of Elaine..love this series so much and just wish the chapters were longer

Question does the woman jack talked to at the graveside of her husband make a reappearance? I think it would be refreshing to sprinkle more kine/human interactions in the story. It's lighthearted and fun like side quest. Plus Jack gets to stay in touch with his human side that much longer with the curse and other problems popping up

@Jasaf It could happen, but I'd be lying if I said it was planned.

MLV kinda jumped into the 'end game' of vampire storytelling early on. I didn't spend much time in the early stages, where vampires spend years learning to be vampires, struggling between their humanity and their beast, essentially being EMO as FUCK and doing things like talking to strangers in graveyards. xD It's just not what the story is about. Sometimes I wish it was, but I'd have had to sacrifice a lot of what MLV is to fit all that sorta stuff in without breaking the story pacing.

am not a fan of the story path with Elaine. Antoinette would be more protective of Jack with Elaine, she knows she is not telling the truth and even though they have shared in the past her feelings of love and protectiveness would win out. I think you are pushing the Elaine thing too hard with Jack. Jack also would find it intriguing to be with them both, but would in the end not do it. Again need more from Clara with Jack and Antoinette.

Don’t like this at all not good enough. Elaine hiding the truth. Lying about connection to jack and just like that it goes to prince being ok with it and jack falling right in step. As I said before your characters are not ones I can believe in. You have drilled into us the distrust of kindred but now they can just trust Elaine to not have an agenda, nope. This has about ruined the whole story. I have stopped at roof scene with them touching and exposing themselves. I don’t think I can read any more. Should have took some time to think about what they would do with Elaine. What it really does is makes me wish jack would say fuck you both and go get Clara and leave. I’m just one person so oh well

Honestly I almost hope a little that jacks mom would die just to go against the prince thinking her safe. And against them letting Jacob get at her. Jack would take his curse kill the whole city including all elders. Story would end with him In Control long enough to chain himself to roof and wait for the sun. So sick of this prince well sick of all these people. They just blow everything off so they can fuck. It’s basically “who cares, they will be fine, let’s go fuck”