by Azrael556
I don't ususally go for BDSM on this board but this one was hot, hot. Write more please!
I am not a big fan of the hard core BDSM but tales like yours
are hot. You have a talent. Hopefully this is only the first
chapter?
Now sit your butt down and write say, nine or ten more chapters of this. LOL I thought it was great. Well done. Maybe shorten some of those paragraphs though. Split them up. They're hard to read on the monitor. - MJL