by splitlapper
Is almost crass, no build up or any attempt at tension, I quit reading. 1 star is more than it deserves.
So many options and certainly the details are vivid! Hope you have more cumin!
The length is ideal. You established the primary charaters, save for Sheila except for her name. The scene is set for subsequent development. Any longer and the tension in their union would have begun to fade.
Now, with most scenarios expectant upon our/the readsers' minds, you can continue with a pleasant growing sexual union between two consenting adults both needing, respecting and caring about and for each other.
I liked the story but think it should have been longer and cared out to a logical conclusion.
Enjoyed your story (so far) but I’m hoping for additional chapters. We need to know if he gets rid of his wife or if all of the slut sister join in the fun mom is having.