by Quiet_Mouse
Lovely story, beautifully crafted, the first I hope of many, please don't leave me hanging here part two? I do hope so. jack.
I hope presages much more from you. I especially liked, what I would call, your use of a 'personal journal' style. Your masterful writing made the transition from innocence into Paradise stunningly memorable.
jjws %)
Well written, intriguing characters, and oh so sexy... I was a pool of melted person by the conclusion. Please don't keep us hanging for the next installment!
What a wonderfully erotic story! I thought you set the stage beautifully and then gave us an incredible description of family love being realized. Bravo! Looking forward to more motherly madness!
Very nicely written. I liked the pace and the way that the story and characters developed.
Good start to story. Nice, easy pace, not too fast or too slow. Enjoyed the almost diary-like viewpoint. Gave the story a more personal feel. 4⭐