by gapster7
INCOMPLETE STORY.....CLEARLY KEN WASN'T PLEASING HER FULLY....SO WHAT DOES SHE TELL HIM
I've cum for the fourth time tonight reading your works. I couldn't stop imagining how good a lover you must be. Damn, you are excellent with build up, with contrasts, and everything in between!!
In all honesty, this is the kind of stuff that reminds me how far I have to go, and how much I have to learn. I don't just mean about writing erotica. I mean writing in general. You're easily one of the best on here. Thank you for writing and for putting this cocky amateur writer in her place. -Serena
Loved the story. Quite visual, and the older /younger story line, was excellent
An arousing read. Nice build-up to the long steady finale.. I'd like to know if it's going somewhere after this.
The only tiny niggle (if that's the right word) was that you need to proofread a little better ... or have somebody else do it. "Moth-watering" indeed.
Very very good read. I love slow buildups and making love not always Fucking. This kinda fell in between the 2 but damn. I could picture how exquisite Chloes body looks and how she responded to how an older very experienced lover treats a lady. Another example of great writing. I too look forward to part 2
Fantastic story! Loved your description of Chole, I could almost see her.
Please continue