All Comments on 'My Rival / My Rival Ch. 05'

Sad to see these characters go but you ended it just like you started it. Perfectly

Waited for this one. Thank you aim

This was a fairytale ending with an even better bonus ending!

A perfect ending to a perfect story. Thank you Amy

The McKayla - Emily love story has been a joy from the very beginning — yes, ups and downs, twists and turns but heading inexorably to this moment. You could feel it all along. Thanks for creating.

I loved the story. I glad the girls worked their way back together. Keep up the good work. You are a great writer.

It is confusing, coz you started of the story with McKayla wanting to be the submissive one. I saw no indication of it changing until the last part, suddenly in this part everything was different... it is onfusing

This was great. I am sorry to see it end. Thank you for your time and you thought in making such an enjoyable read.

This was an absolute treat to read. You concluded mckayla and emilys journey to each other perfectly. What a fantastic story you wrote. Sad to see it end but happy it frees time up for you to write more for us to enjoy.

Spectacular ⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐

Excellent story.

Excellent story!

A wonderful tale and a great showcase for your talents, which are as vast and deep as the Specific Ocean.

I can honestly say that this story from start to finish has been one of the best things I've read. It's ended perfectly which is amazing; I still have to ask though, do you think you'll add to the 5 chapters & continue with their adventures/story? x

Unconditionally Magnificent!!!

Absolutely loved this wonderful Story / Ch. 05 especially the bonus. Also loved the suspenseful nature of Ch. 05. I felt that Tom and Brian were up to no good, when they pointedly separated Emily / McKayla on the boat.

Love Won In The End!!!💗

A 5*-Star Chapter 05 Ending To A 5*-Star Story Series🎉

Just one comment: the past tense of thrust is thrust, not thrusted. Otherwise, cute story.

Sweet series. You wrote all their anxiety and insecurity in a really compelling and relatable way, so the tension release was palpable when they’d let each other know what they really felt.

I personally thought it could’ve done with fewer sex scenes mostly because I enjoy a slow build to something big vs a steady stream of similar encounters, but that’s just my opinion. Overall I thought it was a really enjoyable read. Five stars

Read the whole series in one sitting. Best one I have read so far. Thank you!

Sorry but this last chapter was a rushed and contrived let-down. Every other part was 5/5, but this “conflict” felt so forced

I came to literotica to read smur, but got so much more from this story. I got giddy when they realized and proclaimed their love for each other. I got nervous when I could see the boys conspiring against them. I got enraged when the betrayal came about. And I felt a tear of relief when the truth came out and how it ended.

I started to not even care about the sex (as good as you laid out the scenes) and read for the story.

This is the first story of yours I have read, and I must say it won’t be my last. This was an amazing story that was superbly written! I was hooked from the start. Like many others, I found myself reading for the story, not just the sex. But don’t get me wrong, the sexy parts were amazing! Kinda bummed you didn’t write some kind of revenge that the girls had planned for Brian & Tom….those assholes! I’m really surprised neither one got punched in the nose… Was just hoping to see that they got what they deserved I guess. Lol Just felt like I need that epic revenge prologue…haha!

Anyway…amazing story and writing, and I look forward to reading more of your work! Thank you for sharing your talent!

You write the most flawed but lovable unreliable narrators on the site. Love it!

Well done! Definitely a different take on the “don’t judge a person before you walk a mile in their shoes” phrase. All that perceived hate that never really was.