All Comments on 'My Roommates are Monsters Ch. 01'

I like your story and hope for plenty more installments. I. Keep seeing scarlet johanson as a vampire.

That was an interesting story starter. You have my attention and piqued my curiosity. So lets see we're you plan on taking this story of yours. I gave this chapter 4 stars so far.

Great story! Try not to mix up first person and 3rd person. A lot of paragraphs have "ben did this, felt that" and at the same paragraph you have "I felt my c*** down her throat". Pick first or third person and stick with it.

Meh, Ben comes off as a putz. I get the feeling he's going to be led around by his libido and end up being a bad joke.

Good premise but the protagonist character is hard to connect with. Wouldn't want to be him and doubt I'd want to know him so it's tough to care about what he does or what happens to him.