by Risktaker48
harem mode is one thing. incest/taboo secrets and heat are another. This is a confused jumbled mess, or competing ideas, intermixed with "JOHN DOE, Age 52," paragraphs that both interrupt the reader and make it seem like this is a character sheet for a script to be written later. Hint: harem incest is boring, no matter the writing style.
I like the story! But I thoroughly dislike the writing style.
The nested sentences, streching over entire paragraphs, with partially missing punctuation, makes this quite hard to read (at least for me). And that interjected part in the middle, with the switched POV, didn't exactly help.
Seems a bit disjointed but still fun. Look forward to more if you choose to continue.